We can see many entertainers who are showing their great shape on the medium. The saying goes: The camera never lies. Now, we are starting to confuse the truth on those image illusion.
Those people who use image correction to beautify their face and body shape are very common. The technology of computer is more prosper than before. Why these phenomenon become so popular is just that people wanted to see. In order to attract more people’s attention, they will use the technology to modify the original one. Using the commrecial medium to get more profit, so that the spokesman will get more money.
Everyone wants to be more attracter. So do I. Sometimes the image correction is pretty good to use. We can use it to cover the defects easily. On the contrary, we need to distinguish between right and wrong. The conclusion is that we can not take it seriously.
Hi Cathy,
回覆刪除You need to delete some inappropriate messages posted here, like that of this evil, nasty person called 俊琴.
Regarding your journal,寫得不錯，切題 (這很重要)。感覺你好像有盡力寫，但是有些語法還需要加強。
1. We can see many entertainers who are showing their great shape on the medium. 我覺得可以不要用形容詞子句，只接寫 see many entertainers showing their...
2. The saying goes: The camera never lies. Now, we are starting to confuse the truth on those image illusion.
第一，linking words不順暢，這兩句沒接好
第二，confuse的用法請再 double check
第三，the truth on those image illusion需要大幅修改
3. Those people who use image correction to beautify their face and body shape are very common. 文法完全正確，但Those people...are very common的形容方是很奇怪，請三思而後改
4. The technology of computer is more prosper than before. 這句子前要加linking words才能跟上一句有conherence
5. Why these phenomenon become so popular is just that people wanted to see.
請把is just that people wanted to see大幅修改
6. In order to attract more people’s attention, they will use the technology to modify the original one. 這裡的代名詞they是代表誰?
7. Using the commrecial medium to get more profit, so that the spokesman will get more money.
第一，產品代言人不是spokesman這個字，請找出來
第二，這個句子不合unity
8. Everyone wants to be more attracter.
請把attracter改成正確的形容詞比較級
9. We can use it to cover the defects easily.
the是指定，但是你這裏的defects並沒有先提過或指定喔
10 On the contrary, we need to distinguish between right and wrong. The conclusion is that we can not take it seriously.
這是一個有相當減分作用的ending, 因為沒有跟全文有unity，請大大大大大大大幅修改。