Some universities have labor education, and Chaoyang University is one of them. We always think about why we have duty to clean the campus. The answer is that a neat campus is very important so we must do it.
Every day I get up at 6:30 and ride my scooter to school to do my clean job. It really makes me feel annoyed and bored. The clean leader will check on an area where I do. Then sometimes s/he will give me another troublesome job to do. Furthermore, we can’t complain of anything but do it. Therefore, I made a concession to clean up the campus, but why can't we even choose a session to do the work? Sometimes we don’t have class in the morning; we still need to do it. However, some people don’t want to do it or he/she has too many absences record. The result of it is that they need to do it again in the next semester or they can’t graduate. By the way, this good job is only for the freshmen!
In my opinion, I don’t really like the way the school doing in labor education. Maybe we can clean up the campus once a week, instead. That will be a greater method than nows. Finally, thanks to God that we are approaching sophomore.
Thank gosh了 :D:D
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其他小錯如下
1.
Some of the university has labor education. Chaoyang University is the one of which.
of的限定用法你可能在check一下
改: Some universities have labor education, and Chaoyang University is one of them.
2. The answer is that the neat for campus is very important and we must to do it.
改 a neat campus is very important so we must do it.
3. It really makes me feel annoying and boring.
改feel annoyed and bored
4. Then sometimes he /she will start to order me to do another troublesome thing.
改Then sometimes s/he will give me another troublesome job to do.
5. Furthermore, we can’t complain anything but do it.
第一、poor girl
第二complain要一個介系詞
6. Therefore, I was thinking that it is okay for me to clean up the campus but why we can’t choose the time we can.
改Therefore, I made a concession to clean up the campus, but why can't we even choose a session to do the work?
7. By the way, this good job is only for the freshmen! 哈哈哈 好satiric
8. Maybe we can clean up the campus once a week, instead. That will be a greater method than nows.
不錯的idea
9. Finally, thanks to god that we are approaching sophomore.
god 還是 God?
THANKS JOHN~
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