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Everybody loves to travel. Nowadays, people classify travel to backpacking travel and tour travel trip. First, take expenses budget as example, backpacking travel is more expensive than tour travel for sure. The former is only by oneself and they should know where to go, what is fun. Also don't know the real price on everything. The latter is that they just pay the same money tour planned from everyone. Second, this is a clear difference, backpackers need to prepare all things before they go travel instead of which site is better, how long to stay, where to live, etc,. Tour travelers only need to follow the tour guide. They don't need to worry about those details. The similarities between them are wanted to have fun or challenge themselves. By traveling they can feel relax and fresh the soul also. In my opinion is that both of them have difference meaning to me. I think go backpacking really need to have a great courage. Nobody can stay beside him/her all the time. It's cool! For me, I have traveled with my family several times. But I really can't remember where we have been. The only thing I won't forget is that I have fun time!
You did a good job on listing some similarities and differences between backpacking travel and tour travel trip. Some of your statements are quite interesting as well, such as backpacking travels cost more than tour travel trips.
回覆刪除It is a pity, thought, that some ideas are not put down in a clear way. For instance, it is difficult to understand this sentence :'The similarities on which are want to have fun or challenge themselves.'
Additionally, some minor grammatical mistakes shoudl be avoided. For example, you need to connecct 'Like which site is better...' to its previous sentence by using ',' instead of '.'. Also, 'go backpacking really nned to...' in line 3 from the bottom has an inaccurate subject form.
Finally, which is right, 'beside he/she' or 'beside him/her'?
Fix these little tiny mistakes, please. :)
By the way, I like the real example you used in the end of your article. That's a nice touch.
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